xanthan gum

i loved the entire poem. well... okay: great rhyme, not forced at all, and perfect rhythm. the ending was perfect and beautiful and all ZING! (if that makes any sense). ...

well, rewrite the words "it's" "other" "keeping up" and "competition" and you'll be fine. typos, i'm sure. i really liked this. it was actually sort of funny. and very true ...

this was very cute. not deep, nor amazing...but most definitely cute. as for here: And if you don't like it, Well, that's you spin. this was unnessary and sort of ...

the stanzas didn't really tie into each other, but with the challenge of the poetic compusure, i cannot bring myself to critizise you. it did appear forced in some sections, ...

limericks! they should be applied in poetry far more often than they are, for they are beautiful compositions of strict rules and humorous...well...nonsense. i cannot also help but question the ...

very cute. at first, it appeared random and meaningless and i though QRSTUV stood for something. but then, on reread, i saw how stupid i was.... anyway - it was ...

um, well. (i feel like i'm sinning by critiquing you.) first of all, this distinctly reminded me of MASTER OF THE PUPPETS by Metallica, but since you do not appear ...

this is true, angsty and...well...true? yeah. it's short, and for some reason i want to scream it in some cliche metal song while running around in circles and killing brain ...

oh, god - i think i'm in love with you, too. very sweet. the mathematical jumble was a bit much to work through, but it all made sense. i agree ...

fix "lullabye" and fix the rhythm on this line: Yellow seeps through its bones. otherwise, it was very good. i didn't catch the entire meaning, i'm sure, but i enjoyed ...

perfect images, perfect rhyme. perfectly sweet and short and simple. the rhythm i had to read twice to get it down, but after that it was perfect again. i'm glad ...

mhmm. wow. again, controversal, but good. you seem to have a style of jamming different sentances in, and yes, again, this poem scared me. (i'm not exactly sure if the ...

if you spelled "heroine" wrong at the end by accident, don't change it. if you did that on purpose - great. the flow of the poem could be tied more ...

um. (sorry in advance for the short, bad-quality/quantity of critique. chemistry + me = brain dead.) the poetic quality of this poem wasn't all that good - it didn't have ...

mhmm. very controversal, and sometimes incorhent, but the basic message certainly shined through loud and clear the entire time. it creeped me out a bit, i must come to admit, ...